So I had a lot of feedback on my demo. Thanks for those who commented there. I had most of the feedback from my personal FB. Lots of people like the chorus singing. Almost everyone hated the verse vocals ( I did have bronchitis and tried my best, and just was impossible but I really wanted feedback).
I had feedback by some band geeks too who had a lot of experience in recording. First off, the song had composition errors. It was not the best arrangement. After realizing that; you can hear it out fo rhythm. So I fixed that. The rhytm is a bit faster.
Secondly, the verse just seems odd to me. At first I thought itd fit, then I realized it doesn't really stay in tuned with the song and it has a weak melody. So I rewrote that. I also rewrote the bridge and I added a "outro" I guess to the song to resolve it.
Lastly, the structure has imrpoved. I made the structure similar to one of my favorite songs "Without Wings" by YOHIO which was the original inspiration of this song. Even though the song is kow faster paced than the demo, I extended it to 5:30 mins. 😂
Anyways, I don't have a deadline. I am being super strict about vocals. I am rrying to get it perfect as humanly possible meaning I want to be organic of course, so I am recording takes after takes instead of using pitch correction.